2012年7月23日月曜日

英国ボタニカルアーティスト協会通信講座第3課の提出結果

プロの目とはすごいものですね。インストラクターに教えていただけるのですが、一対一でおしえていただけたらなぁ...と思いました。
今回のインストラクターのMs. Eileen Maddison はとても丁寧に採点シートを書いてくださっています。
掲載するのが恥ずかしい点数ですが、ここは正直に。今回は8.41でした。

以下にコメントを転載いたします。

1. You chose your leaves very well. There is a wide variety of shapes & textures, & they are well drawn.

2. The leaf outlines are well painted, & I particularly like the decorative outline of the Arum. Long stems are difficult, especially when they have a tendency to twist or curl, like the Arum & Hosta. You could improve the appearance of these two stems by neatening up their edges. The long Hosta stem should look strong.

3. Form & structure is quite clear on most of the leaves, but the Tradescantia, although well drawn, needs more contrasting tones to give a 3-demensional appearance.

4.Tone on the Magnolia leaf if very good. you have captured the dark glossy surface and bright highlights. Some lighter tone on the Pelargonium, especially on the nearer edge, would have livened it up, & the Tradescantia leaves have almost no variation subject in a  good light.

5.There is a good range of greens from the bluishi Hosta to the yellowish green Dandelion. The clours of the Paeony blend well. However I feel that  the Pelargonium could be a brighter green, &
the edges of this leaf look too dull.

6 This is a lively & imaginitive composition. The Arum is well placed in the center, where its strong stem line & decorative outlines pull the eye in. The right hand side is a bit fussy as four plants are superimposed, and the long stem of the Tradescantia unfortunately runs along the edge of the Magnolia as if it was attached! On the whole however, you have done very well.

7. Detail has been well observed & accurately drawn. Veining on the Paeony leaves is well done.

8. Your technique is careful & well controlled. Try starting with light washes, building up the tone when the first wash is dry. This would be agood way to deal with a Pelargonium leaf, & any other leaf with distinct patches of colour. Add essential small details & crisp up edges of leaves & stems as a final touch.

9. Your work is neatly presented.

10. Labeling clearly written.

I have made some sketches to illustrate my comments.
I hope you will find these helpful .



以上のコメントでした。
プロってすごいですね~。コメントの正確なことに感動!圧倒されそうですが。これからがんばれるでしょうか。

ボタニカルアートを勉強されている方にちょっとでも参考になりお役に立てたらうれしいです。スペルが間違っているところがあると思いますが、原稿が手書きですので私の読み違えにちがいありません。